Friday, April 8, 2011

d c feature leads

Leads:

Descriptive: A stack of pristine, untouched work papers lie on his desk. Next to is a jumble of half-chewed pencils, pens, erasers and a couple of pills of traditional Chinese herbal medicine. A man leans back in his soft-leather executive chair. He’s on the phone with a potential investor, trying to secure a large sum of investment to get the company by for the next few months. A few rays of light peek through the drab window shades, casting long shadows throughout the room. Green vegetation dot the room, slightly brightening up the grey and blue building. The man, having finished his call, stretches up and walks satisfyingly over to his window and looks out to the city below him.

Twist: Who is an entrepreneur? Society's opinion, and probably yours, is that an entrepreneur is a brave, smart, fearless and innovative person who through their charismatic leadership maintain a friendly yet working relationship with their employees. Their business starts small and grows exponentially, making big money while at the same time eventually becoming a shining symbol of their countries economies. Unfortunately, the truth cannot be further than this. For every successful start-up there are thousands that fail. To just reach a decade of existence is great challenge in itself, never mind making money.

Startling statement: After years of hard work and desperate perseverance, Wei Xingzhao finally realized that, “In the modern world, the company actually has very little power.”

12 comments:

  1. I'm going to have to go with number three, but take out the quotation marks. You're right, it's a startling statement. I would write it as this:

    Startling statement: After years of hard work and desperate perseverance, ___ company CEO Wei Xingzhao finally realized that in the modern world, the company actually has very little power.

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  2. The third lead is the most effective, but I think the other leads could work well. They all have a few grammar issues.

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    Quaver from Aux Cable(AS)

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  3. HEY BESTIE! :D

    second or third. grammar issues in all of them, though...

    -Nat

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  4. I like #1 the best....#2 is pretty weird and confusing.

    #3 is okay.

    -Fly on the Wall

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  5. I think that they are all good, but #2 would work the best. The first one sort of lost my interest after a while and the second one was all right.

    -Juumbie

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  6. 1 is the best, 2 shows perhaps the most potential. Not altogether sure where it's going, though, which could be a problem.

    Not a fan of your keyboard. No need to fear me stealing it.

    Not sure what's going on with three, either.

    Grammar fixes necessary on all 'n' stuff.

    Yeah.

    --IBI

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  7. The descriptive lead is definitely the best. The imagery was nice.

    ~ OMO

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  8. I think I like the last one the best. The first seemed kind of irrelephant.

    - EJE

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  9. One is pretty-sounding and two is interesting. I think either could work. I'm not sure that the startling statement is startling enough.

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  10. I like the last one the best, but the first set up a scene which also was good.

    _yahir

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